lou
lou
Nov 16, 2010

Fuck Warning profanity !!!!

Fuck the clever dicks of this world ,
Who think they know better.
Piss on those who live to put you down.

Shit on those who don't accept my choices,
They are mine and mine alone.
Even if my language makes you frown.

I'm sick of worrying about opinion,
I'm gonna be me.
If you don't like it ,
Then bollocks to this fucking town

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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Comments

Race_9togo

No argument from ME on the subject.

lou

lou

14 years 5 months ago

Poetry, is freedom to push the boundaries

Lou.

lou

lou

14 years 5 months ago

Your my champion , a big support, love ya !!

Lou

Geezer

Geezer

14 years 5 months ago

A good old - fashioned rant
For those who say I can't
I would tell them where to go
But I think they already know

Hope they take a cue from this
I'll point them where to kiss
Mind not what they have to say
I'll be doing it my way

Couldn't help myself, just keep on being you. ~ Love ya, Gee

S

Your poetry would improve greatly if you would just say what you REALLY feel lol.........scribbler

K

Young lady! Do you eat with that mouth? Sorry, couldn't help myself... there's just so much bullshit on my plate these days.

;-)

And Stan I'd be careful twhat I ask of Lou....she just might tell you, and then what? lol,.

Victorclaude

Lou,

What can I say but rock and fuckin' roll~?~!~!

Victor

loved

loved

14 years 5 months ago

the master of thy dick
piss
and shit
i hate these fuckin words
come out of my fucking
salivary lips

but

we all do say so
yes
loves the fucking word
we like to hear
from a poet like lou
yeah yeah
that's uuuuuuuuuuuuuuu

yeah twice
as u don't like to hear
or do thrice

lou

I'm sorry didn't mean to be rude, thank you for your kind remarks

Lou

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years 5 months ago

Lou,

this had a good aggressive tempo and theme, and I liked the rhyming of the last lines. The last stanza was a little short in the last line, so if you wanted it to be uniform, you could add 'fucking'...before 'Town'.

My OCD tells me the last stanza should have lines 2 & 3 on the same line in keeping with the other two stanza's.

Brutishly angry...love it!

HS

lou

lou

14 years 5 months ago

Thanks mate, glad you liked it, i like to give my poems a very strong british feel . when i can, as you know.

lou

lou

lou

14 years 5 months ago

Ian

thank you .

lou