The distant echoes
into the Forest
I move in alone
how far I shall go
that’s yet unknown
but deep enough to gain my right
and
still not remain out of human sight
but then the forest is far too deep
how much will the darkness sweep
my mind will be a vast lonely desert
with none to converse
the darkness is now most intense
how will I observe
am I still moving into darker ravines
no my voice tells me
the other half of the forest
is like a path into awakening
as from the middle
of the density
I shall be like lightening
entering into the sun’s rising streaks
so out of the forest now I meekly
seek
light re-emerges and makes me wise
the darkness by now subsides
I am out in the open
for all to perceive
from the darkness
emerges a newer soul
and
now is about time
to reach my final goal
Comments
Ok,
That was refreshing ... stop using
"tis", it is the wrong century and
every time I see it you appear desperate.
good poem
Thanks the moonman
noticed and slashed it 23rd century
The flow is beautiful. Thanks
The flow is beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
your maiden visit invigorates me
I can see the sincerity
deep from within
did you ead this
many said it was or rather is good
Hi Lovedly
I really iked this. I had to read it three times to get the full flow. Not a problem on your end. I tend to read with my own cadence after writing for too long. Then reading others writing.
Below are the best parts of this poem for me.
am I still moving into darker ravines - Great wording here. a very vivid image.
no my voice tells me - This entire stanza tells the story. Alive, seeking, hunting, craving the
the other half of the forest way to understand. Finds his/her strength like lightening, but
is like a path into awakening still not to sure if that strength will last. Loved it.
as from the middle
of the density
I shall be like lightening
entering into the sun’s rising streaks
so out of the forest now I meekly
seek
Thanks Rottie for your maiden and lovely comments
as one enters a forest
first half one is entering
second half one is leaving it Isn't it so
that's what I know
Yes....
my review was particularly about the " leaving the forest" That one great stanza made me feel good about it.
Great job again.
Loved Or Lovedone or even lovedly
Great write and you should be pleased how this one resonates with most readers.
Keep up the good work and as you practice the contest prize could be yours .
Take care and know I joke sometimes lol,
Yours Ian ..
on reconsideration Ian
the contest prize could be
ONLY YOURS
IAN
Take care and know
I KNOW YOU joke MOST OF THE times
RFLOL
I AM REPLACING AUTUMN'S POEMS WITH THE SADNESS ONE
SUDDENLY LIFE ONE
did u not scan it Pl do Ian