fools in a paradise

We all live
in a fool's paradise
believe me
It is only a mental surmise

so rise
to the occurrence of today
tomorrow may come

It may not...

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read

The first part repeats the thought - we live in a fools paradise/there is no paradise....(waffle)
and imo, it needs stanza breaks

we all live
in a fool's paradise
believe me
It is only a mental surmise

so rise
to the occurrence of today
tomorrow may come

It may not...

Totally imo only, remember
love judy
xxx