vandiemenspeak
vandiemenspeak
Oct 24, 2018

Fledgling flight.

When her flight clicks to a shut
Worm clutched
The chorus begins, that pronounces:
“Bring it in, in bring in!”
I am the more worthy,
I am the greater to sing
Out of this cacophony of chirrups
To me, to ME, you bring!

Survival is by numbers,
And those that sing their loudest worth;
Gain the fatter worms
Drawn out of the earth,
Arched across the sky in
A perpetual evolutionary flight,
By those who will soon outlive
Their wings.

And the young shall continue,
All a clatter clinking flutter,
Edging out into the morning light
We may capture them, if early,
In their fledgling flight,
And the earnest process again, begins.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Observing a constant returning, patient, feeding starling.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Tasmania,Australia,Earth,Solar Systems,Milky way,Pint of Guniess, AUS

Favorite Poets: Glen Richards

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Comments

IRiz

IRiz

6 years 6 months ago

Strong and shocking lines.
I like the image of those who outlived their wings.
It breaks my heart to imagine.

vandiemenspeak

They are actually nesting above my makeshift laundry! I try not to disturb them when they're active, which makes laundry a bit of a challenge. There are a profusion of birds that live around the little hut. Thanks for reading and seeing in all senses.

Cheers

Chris.

zebra

zebra

6 years 6 months ago

Natures viciousness caught in perfect eloquence.
Worm clutched, so Pulitzer.
I love the writing, as if hell goes down like a milkshake

vandiemenspeak

I love the phrase "hell goes down like a milkshake"! There's a poem in that itself. Oddly, they seem to be quite fussy about the worms, even alighting on the roof with one specimen, then seemingly unsatisfied, flying off to grab a bigger one.

Cheers.

Chris.