Fixing a Hole

Like a tool I’ve lost, or loaned to someone maybe,
in my mind there never seems to be just the one I need
to fix the fissures and hollows that sometimes consume my attention
in this broken-down palace of you no longer here

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Playing around with form - single stanza poem.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski

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Comments

Thank you for the kind words

Thank you for the kind words Mark! Attitude definitely plays a part, but sometimes the grief can overwhelm the best of tools my friend. ; - )

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Succinct and to a point!!!

I respect your writing the short, and powerful poem. I admire a short piece that works. Seems that I cannot write a short piece like that (well).

Nicely done.

did you know that there is an old Beatles song by the same name?
https://youtu.be/UPBd8eHQqIw
I think it is a 1967 release…. From a masterful album: “Sgt Pepper’s Lonely Hearts Club Band”

Thank you Ray! Really

Thank you Ray! Really appreciate your visits and sharing your thoughts - glad you liked this one.

I struggle reading poems that are too cryptic or needlessly wordy (could also be that I'm not smart enough to understand them, I suppose) I think I mentioned this before, but many of my short poems start out MUCH longer. I enjoy the task of distilling them down to extract a clarity of theme I'm looking for. This is often a challenge because we all like our words, and we can be reluctant to place them aside to achieve a goal of a clear message, artfully executed, and one a reader can relate to. Sometimes I get there, and many times, well... Not sure if that makes sense, but that's what's going on inside my brain when I write short poems.

I am aware of the the song by the Beatles of the same name. Hopefully Sir Paul won't mind my small bit of plagiarism - LOL!

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