c lynn brooks
Sep 09, 2021
This poem is part of the challenge:

Neopoet Random Challenge 7

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On first teaching( Butterflies in my stomach challenge)

First day of class
How many students
Ah the schedule says twelve

They have come to learn
but can I teach
they know nothing of writing but I do

I speak and I am a voice
outside of me
do they know I am as nervous as they?

Ah but the butterflies are still there
although they do not show
my heart is beating louder than a drum
can they hear it as well?

It s their first day as well as mine
but we will both
survive

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Region, Country: north carolina usa, USA

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Geezer

the line that makes it part of the challenge? Nervous might be described as shaky knees, rubber-legs, palpitations, etc. I see nothing about butterflies in the stomach. ~ Gee.
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C

hmmm you are right going to revise that a bit

Geezer

Now, what about changing the first line of the last stanza? Instead of: [as well as], how about, "It is their first day, like mine..."
~ Geez.
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C

Thanks for the suggestions Yes I made some changes now it reflects the challenge