astonished veins
are bursting
with poems
among the debris
I find a notebook,
sitting on the edge
midnight sparked a flame
and ate through the page,
my first word
was confused and excited
burning to a nova
images of purple dawns
bright green moons
pink trees and yellow blooms.
flood my memory,
these are the shining eyes
of a night walker
reflected in the window
of your black soul.
a skein of feeling
pimples my skin
a crevice
of undiscovered lines
thought dead,
have life and breadth
and now triumphant
I have found my face
by tasting
the cracked salt of tears.
I was 'all but',
I am again.
Comments
Hello Jayne!
I think this piece is fine "as is" but if you feel it needs further work, well, hey, you're the author! I especially admire the tone of the poem and the way it conveys its essence to the reader! Very nice!
Hello Lonnie
I am very happy you liked this one, I am not finished with it yet its not quite there, I have had some suggestions messaged to me so I plan to go through them and see if I can implement them into the poem
so nice to see you and I really appreciate your feedback
love to you both JC xxx