RoseBlack
RoseBlack
Nov 15, 2022

Fallen Leaves

I am the fallen leaves
From a tree that's lived too long
Wilting branches
Broken at the seams

My tears are that
Of the willow
Weeping, grieving
For this life I had

I've been dead inside
Longer than alive

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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Comments

Jackweb

Amazing! Every word is perfect. The layers are thick in metaphor. Great job.
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Candlewitch

Autumn is my season. I feel an affinity to her. she is morbidly artistic in raw truth and so is this piece. very well done.

*hugs, the Cat

Candlewitch

I am doing better with both the covid and the resulting of my fall. the bruises are bone deep. with the covid, it keeps giving me shots of extreme symptoms , I won't gross you out by writing them here. I sleep a lot. drop by here as often as I can. watching over y'all as a benevolent spirit ;)

*hugs, Cat

RoseBlack

You will be on the mend soon. I had covid in the beginning of October and the fatigue was the worst for me. The rest felt like I had the flu.

Candlewitch

I am not far from the bathroom, but I've had a few "accidents" unable to get there in time. I sleep a lot too. my legs are terribly fatigued. slowly I am starting to feel better. thanks for your good thoughts for my well being. much appreciated.

Steven is an angel, he waits on me hand and foot, as they used to say. he has cleaned me up a few times after a bathroom fiasco. most of the time, I feel like a limp noodle.

*hugs, Cat

Geezer

the barren side of a relationship. You really made this one stand out! It was brief but was full of expression.
Nice job! ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Hi, RoseBlack,
The title and the theme throughout reveal an overwhelming weariness along with the spoken grief. Wonderful vivid imagery.
L