When my boat leaves sight
beyond that far horizon
will I have ever been?
May 31, 2019
FADING SAIL
About This Poem
Last Few Words: OK, I'm obviously going for a HAIKU and I'm aware the last line is one syllable too long.....so any suggestion that will give same meaning is welcome
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Hi Mark
Very good suggestion. When your stuff is usually as long winded as mine is it sometimes makes it hard to think in a concise manner lol. As to book, it's getting closer
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^5...?
obvious now
Old luddites like me need our hands held lol