vandiemenspeak
vandiemenspeak
Mar 28, 2016

Elysium

To seek nothing from you,
or your treasures;

to be just near to you
is close enough,

a match for elysium
or the very heaven that I lack.

While the world without, dissembles and burns;
and its vortices around turn, turn,

without heed, indifferent to these
two little lights below.

Seek illumination with me,
take me with you,
I will go.

You lead with your soft
arpeggio,

Your notes, like drips of promises
from leaves;

sensing the need of thirsting animals
beneath.

Your sound so sweet, enticing, lovely-
on the only path they’ll ever know.

Seek humanity with me people,
touch me, I will follow.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Another little experimental response to music (If your're interested I'm having a Brian Eno binge), it's aim to seek peace in a time of apparent discord everywhere.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Tasmania,Australia,Earth,Solar Systems,Milky way,Pint of Guniess, AUS

Favorite Poets: Glen Richards

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Comments

Sparrow

Good write and it flowed well, good to see you here again.
There is only one place that I would query and ask for you to edit that is the lines:-
While the world without, dissembles and burns;
and its vortices around turn, turn,
I would have the break after without, then move the and to between the two turns, or just leave the and out all together..
Take care out there and know we do listen and read as we can.
Yours as always Ian..