Are we passed the halfway mark
Between death and trying?
Between the love we've lost
Any the endless denying?
You crossed the line
Never to walk back around again
You never knew you had left
Till it was too late
to touch the ground again.
Hallowed it was all these years
Now it's hollowed out by these torrents of tears.
Jan 03, 2020
Dying embers
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Comments
fifth line
first word did you mean to use and?
I love your title, peggedit.
I love your title, peggedit. You have some corrections to make, with "and" and "have" maybe. Check it out, I'll return because I've an appointment.