Kailashana2
Jul 21, 2011

drops of you

the smell of you
permeates my skin
drops of you
resonate

i am a bow for your
plucking, you are my
instrument

play me

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: Ohio, USA

Favorite Poets: Bokonon: “Let your life be the poem you write”.

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lou

lou

13 years 9 months ago

This is a sensual poem, but I'd change the word smell in the first line, maybe you could say, 'your trace permeates my skin,' or 'the trace of you permeates my skin'.

Lou

K

Lou!

I did not want to make this a sickeningly sweet poem....using scent of you or fragrance of you, so the *smell* seemed appropriate when engaging in animal lust, modified with a little *music*..

:-)

~A

lou

lou

13 years 9 months ago

Fine

Lou

K

Hmmm. This is a purely sexual poem, Ian. The bow refers to body and the instrument refers to well... you know...and so by now you can gather what song is being played...?.

Thanks for reading Ian. And maybe it is a cliche. lol.

~A