The thrill of the chase
satin and lace
The ecstasy of being caught
wedding dress sought
The miracle of first born
christening gown, already worn
The sadness of divorce
dressed for hearse
The thrill of the chase
satin and lace
The ecstasy of being caught
wedding dress sought
The miracle of first born
christening gown, already worn
The sadness of divorce
dressed for hearse
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
I get the idea
however it reads a bit like a list.
Usually I suggest less words not more, this could benefit from conjunctions.
thanks x
thanks x