I can emulate my own, best amigo
or my fiercest, and worse enemy;
I also could end up easily, beside myself
continually, convicingly arguing things over, and over with, me!
However, whatever I'm feeling down inside
will usually fade, and disappear from my view;
unless, of course I see right through myself
with my hidden agendas all shining through.
Plus, I even seem to be more confused, of late
and so unsure of which facts I should give;
I actually did want to get my whole story, straight
but I've been indicisive, and so, argumentative.
I've also been so, very distant
and long-distance relationships, suck!
I then became wistfull, and serendipitiously
took turns, taking sides, with no luck.
Now, finally convinced I am trustworthy
I've made an example of myself plain to see;
if the most unheard of thing I have heard of
in the long run, will still sound good to me!
I honestly can't say, that I honestly care
to side in with one who can't, or won't say;
exactly what each of his minds, think
and which one will soon get, his own way!
Comments
me lurve your title!
me lurve your title!
it's what drew me to read this write
i like that this seems to fall somewhere between
humour and pathos (well, it did for me!)
there are a couple of places i think could
benefit from some tightening up...perhaps just
lose the odd word or two...and i definitely
think you have over-used the humble comma...the over-use
here hinders a natural thought patten and causes the reader
to pause where they need not
regardless of that hic-up, i think you have
taken an unoriginal theme, and given it an
original twist
cheers
p
Well, Pleiades....
...I just "lurve" the curve of your verbs....while commenting, as well! Plus, I've always favored the pathetic side of my humorousity! That's exactly why I limply, and gimply "pimp" out those unsuspectng commas...I guess that's how us old, poetical gangsters "come a-" -round to finishing things.
Your comment was a delight!
Sincerely, thanx;
doc.