Just a brush of your hand
sends my pulse racing
a blush on my cheek
imagining where it could be tracing
Torture being so close
and not being able to kiss you
feelings of remorse
inviting a visitor or two
Wanting you so much
unable to hold you in my arms
avoiding the slightest touch
because I can't resist your charms
Bound to you, body, heart and soul
never knew such passion
my desire I'm trying to control
as the potatoes I'm mashing
Dinner is finally served
I'm going to be dessert
acting all shy and reserved
hard, when you want to flirt
Comments
Cute ending.
I'll make a suggestion that you can take or leave knowing that a lot of the poets here disagree with me, but you might want to consider using punctuation. I think it aids in leading the reader.
Good rhyme scheme.
thanks so much for reading
thanks so much for reading and commenting much appreciated I didn't think it needed it but I'll play around with it cheers x
I really liked the concept of
I really liked the concept of the poem and I especially enjoyed the line: "Torture being so close/ and not being able to kiss you..." It's a very relate-able thought.
Hi again you are kind I love
Hi again you are kind I love that line 2 so thanks for picking it out cheers x
I was...
just wondering why the person couldn't respond to the temptation of the other? Was it just because there were guests? Nice work, I like the concept, just wasn't sure about the why of it. ~ Geezer
Hi Geezer yep its because we
Hi Geezer yep its because we have guests lol glad u enjoyed cheers x