Rula
Rula
Nov 04, 2014
This poem is part of the workshop:

Can you make a limerick serious?

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Digital Drugs

Digital drugs are becoming the dread
that fears the world, youth are dead
with beats and sounds
that cost but pounds
the venom drone, on and on, fast spread.

To learn more:
http://www.wired.com/2010/07/digital-drugs/

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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

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Rula

Rula

10 years 5 months ago

Spot on. Edited accordingly.
Appreciate the visit and the comment.

alidzain

Interesting concept but I still don't understand what do you mean by "digital drugs". Care to elaborate?

Alid

Rula

Rula

10 years 5 months ago

this is a new kind of drugs. I have added a link for more information. VERY dangerous.

Rula

Rula

10 years 5 months ago

it's not only a serious limerick, but an eye opener too.
I missed you. Where have you been. Hope all is well brother.

alidzain

Kinda busy after some unexpected happenings but I did post some poetry here. The latest is "Breaking Free", its about freeing oneself from hypocrisy.

Alid

wesley snow

The damn computers keep breaking or at the very least behaving as if possessed.

MOG! You can run, but... I'll hunt to the ends of the Earth.

The poem's subject is relevant, so it certainly qualifies as serious, but I'm not convinced I hear a limerick in the rhythm.

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 5 months ago

I am quite close to making this limerick thing,
Yours it near to the write way but here I will say:-

The typical rhythm of a limerick is like this:-

bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH.

bah = delicate syllable.. BAH= hard syllable..

Is the right way,
maybe the sheep know better,
still I shall try harder with my letter.

Yours J Sparrow
("John" not Jack this time the four or five of us are doing fine.lol)

wesley snow

The meter is catalyctic anapest with judicious use of iambs here and there. A little bit of messing it about is okay, but to change the meter you described with your bahs is to be abhorred. It's a little like the riddle game. Cheating is against the rules even for cheaters.