Christopher Stuart
Christopher Stuart
Apr 27, 2022

Different Paths

If you search for wealth
walk a path well known
If you search for love
walk a path less known
If you search for peace
walk a path together
If you search for God
walk a path forever.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Australia, AUS

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 12 months ago

but if you want to make rhymes, you should make a longer story, this is more like a quotation, because it is so short.
Good, but need longer. ~ Geez.
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Christopher Stuart

Thanks Gezzer, I will add some more lines, couldn't sleep again last night, my mind is always switched on. Finally went to sleep about 5am but up at 7am. Regards Chris.

Geezer

I have the same problem; I don't sleep well. If I have four hours straight, that is a good night. Usually, it is more like an hour and a half and then up for 30 mins. and back to sleep for another hour and a half. Sometimes, I wake at 3 am and then don't get back to sleep until after breakfast and Neo. then another hour or two sleep around 9:30 until 11:00. It's hard to make up for that kind of crazy. ~ Geezer.
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Christopher Stuart

I know exercise will make you sleep like a baby but I cant do that much because of my heart, I'm not overweight just was given a bad heart when God was handing them out. Can't go back and ask for a replacement, but I will remind him when I see him. Maybe he will give me a second chance. Regards Chris

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 12 months ago

the addition of the new lines, they make it more of a poem. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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