Morning
chilly, dewy
refreshing, astounding, aspiring
virgin, placid, quiet, elegant
freezing, amusing, inspiring
romantic, dark
Night
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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Rula
The only thing I can say is:- "Lovely". I will play with the words and send them to you..
Yours as always Ian xx
Morning
The edge of the night makes the air chilly,
Contrasting temperatures makes the grass dewy.
Refreshing the world with a sprinkling of diamonds,
Astounding me with the sparkles of a rainbow,
Aspiring to grasp my thoughts of being reborn,
I walk across the grass leaving a virgin trace
Wandering near to the placid lakes cool face.
There the quiet soaked my spirit yet lifted it.
Elegant young trees reached for the waters.
Not afraid of the freezing mist arising there.
It seemed to be amusing itself as the sun rose
Inspiring me, as it painted a scene for the day
I missed the romantic feelings as the night fled,
There the dark peace had embraced me well,
I shall await the night where I seem to be free.
Yours, Ian T xx
Hello Ian
great to hear from you after this long time.
Will be happy to see you playing with words.
Thanks for stopping and commenting.
Hello Jerry
Thank you for the visit. Always great to hear from you
I usually like to play with new forms.
Appreciate your time and the comment. Would be great to see you trying your hand with this form... maybe one day. :)
lovely play of words romantic
do enjoy also my
tulips poetry
like daffodils
Rula
Thank you
lovedly for you kind visit.