he
is still on dialysis
but kith and kin don't know
when to let him go
hope God
helps them ...
the finale none know
not you... nor I...
no doc too
heaven is too busy...
we always knew
and
if there is a God
of which I have reservations....
I’m quite sure he has 7.5 billion
in the ICU
we call the world...
and
I only wish that ailing humanity
Came with life to terms
all we need is
a switch off
switch
but then who will?
Comments
yea
great write loved
very clever, and sad
'he is still on dialysis
but kith and kin don't know
when to let him go
hope God helps them so' (but i'd drop the 'so')
i really like
'if there is a God
of which i have reservations....
I’m quite sure he has 7.5 billion
in the ICU
we call the world...' - lol
and i love the finish
love judy
xxx
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thanks Judy
ur kind a lady
tc of all ur kids in hospy
they all will remember you
as I will toooooooooooooooooo
one other tiny thing
thankyou for the acknowledgement in the first stanza, but to make this more succinct (imo) i'd drop that first stanza altogether now too, as it's not really needed for the theme...
xxxx
thy wish
is my command
but to obey
shall now
lol loved
why change 'he' to 'the guy'?
i think 'he' is so much better, more poetic
xxx
got confused
corrected thanks for the interest taken
regards Judy
Thank you for your kind appreciation regards
"if there is a God
of which i have reservations....
I’m quite sure he has 7.5 billion
in the ICU
we call the world"
even now I realise these words are touching,
more to the credit of an
UNKNOWN DEITY,if any.