little does she know that she will have to choose
,when her parents get devorced which one she will lose
and little does she know that the alcohol she drinks
is the one thing that will put her on the brink...
Nov 01, 2018
DEVORCE 2
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Succinct
And relateable - this says a lot with so few words Scooby.
Thanks.
Chris.
DEVORCE and DEVORCE 2
Was the mispelling of divorce on purpose? Perhaps to make the child experiencing it seem younger?
Both really good, clear and important poems.