Depression (an acrostic attempt)

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Depression (An Acrostic Attempt)" successfully uses the acrostic form to convey a deep and complex exploration of depression. The choice of words and the imagery used effectively depict the darkness and despair associated with the condition.

However, it is suggested to maintain consistency in the tense used throughout the poem. For instance, the line "E-ating your heart out with a passionless cry" uses the present tense, while "S-orry for things, you know will happen again" uses the future tense. Consistency in tense can help maintain the flow and coherence of the poem.

Moreover, the line "I-deals blown to hell as you take the dark part" could benefit from clarification. The phrase "take the dark part" is somewhat ambiguous and could be interpreted in various ways by different readers. If the intention was to maintain a level of ambiguity, then this has been achieved. However, if a specific meaning was intended, it may be beneficial to revise this line for clarity.

Lastly, the rhythm of the poem could be improved. The lines vary significantly in length and syllabic count, which can disrupt the rhythm when reading. Maintaining a more consistent syllabic count could enhance the overall flow of the poem.

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I think you pretty well covered depression (as an art form ie with a critical eye.) I recognize myself in the lines of your poem. Your Acrostic is excellent! Very well done!

*hugs & love, Cat

You really hit the nail on the head when describing the battle with depression. Owning your feelings-whatever they are is a powerful line to me. I tend to shove my feelings down and ignore them rather than bring them to the surface and acknowledge them. Well done