Death by uselessness.
What do you do?
Reproduce?
You'll be forgotten in three generations.
Write poetry?
Oh please, you'll be forgotten in five minutes.
Let's face it,
you are soon gone and forgotten.
Immortality is a farce.
Reproduction is most often perpetrated
by the inept and morons,
a reversal of natural selection.
Who said human life is sancrosanct?
Who said that?
Some religious freak.
It's not nice to kill other people,
but that is pragmatic,
you get punished.
You want to make a difference?
Spread memes,
tell truths
like corporations are evil
greed is not human nature
original sin is a vicious lie.
Make a difference.
Think, read, tell the truth.
Treat faith as brain damage.
It could be a good chance for survival.
Comments
hi jess
the only truth I find in here jess
‘Write poetry?
Oh please, you'll be forgotten in five minutes’
The rest is either ‘teachy’, or takes off as a vacuous rant.
I have faith in me… some faith is beneficial, one shouldn’t be encouraged to treat it as ‘brain damage’
lol – I know you were talking about blind religious faith, but it reads as it reads as it reads…
typo sancrosanct (sacrosanct)
I would seriously cull this if I was allowed to
Death by uselessness.
Immortality is a farce.
original sin is a vicious lie.
Who said human life is sacrosanct?
Who said that?
Some religious freak?
we don’t kill,
but that is pragmatic,
we avoid punishment.
What do we do?
Reproduce?
We’ll be forgotten in three generations.
Write poetry?
Oh please, we'll be forgotten in five minutes.
Want to make a difference?
Think, read
Spread memes,
tell truths
love judy
xxx
it's not poetry, it's a rant.
Just felt like saying it.
lol
well i reckon it still sounds better the way i said it
xxxx
too right, it does,
but it's just something that spilled out and I don't feel like working on it.
Dear Jess,
I was thinking of you, and your trial by fire, so I stopped by. It is good to see you writing. I would call this a poetic rant, not just a rant. I have to agree with most of it, except for the kind of faith that Judy pointed out. I liked these lines best:
Make a difference.
Think, read, tell the truth.
Treat faith as brain damage.
It could be a good chance for survival.
but I would have said: Treat religion as brain damage.
love, Cat (& all)
ta Cat,
As much as I detest the stupid, abusive, execrable Ayn Rand, the one thing she said that rings true to me is "faith is not a short-cut to knowledge, it is a short-circuit in the brain"
Faith is a problem as much as organised religion. It is just stupid. It can be seen in the light of the psychological definition of delusion "that which is obviously true to an individual or group, despite all the facts"
Nice read
The more I read the more I found an appreciation of what this piece meant from my stand point.I rant alot in my poetry but the truth behind the statements you were making were real insightful.This was the first time I've read one of your poems and I'm planning on reading more.You are who you are
Peace
thanks NN
as I've been getting more feedback on this one I'm considering coming back to revise it to higher prosodic values.
Jess
There you go again falling off your toadstool, ranting away with the true thoughts thinly disguised..
If I could remember what you said as it's been over five minutes since I read something distracting by someone I knew.
Ha, attack on the faiths, yes that's you, and the little rant about morons reproducing, Totally agree with you, but they have got rid of selection of the best now Hitler is dead, (though his ways were corrupt as usual) and we haven't evolved, as I say since we first recognised ourselves in a reflection.
I then thought that your higher prosodic values was a complete typo of Higher Pro Sod It Values, where you would be better asking the lady on the corner for her idea on a better mankind.
Give over, your rant is grand and a bit tame for you..
It would be good to have a truth corner where for once we spoke a few selected words on how we interpreted life as we live it, and how we really felt about things, most of us lie through our teeth at most things, Maybe poetry is one of those places where truth of feelings though disguised shows what we really think, therefore Are,
Yours Ian.T
PS:- maybe you could have life membership with these people LOL...
http://grumpy-people.com/index.php
One of the best comments I've had, my friend,
If I am the Shark your are the Heart of Neopoet.
Yey I refuse to define myself as a curmudgeon. Just say my truth with better or worse prosodic value.
But it is easier for me, I can write crap or well defined prosody in any form, I've done the hard learning work for over 40 years. So I can forgive myself crap.
For others, well, I won't name names but someone sent me a PM recently saying how do I write as well as you as you do? It is so hard! I want to give up.
Well listen, little fuckers, I have worked hard most of my life to become moderately good at the world's most demanding artform, poetry. If you won't work at it, read it, critique it, engage your soul with it, fuck off out of it because you will never become even adequate.
Except for some natural geniuses, and on Neopoet I could only name Esker and Lonnie.
Keep,
Keep it coming the truth will out, and so will the poet. Regards Roscoe..
ta mate
sorry I haven't been reading and replying lately, been in a bad, bad place.
Dear Jess,
How are you? I am worried.
always, Cat & all
back soon.
remember my old tag line?
"The nature of Jess is irrepressible"
Jess
We so look forward to suffering your scorn again lol.
Great to know that you are returning from your holiday, did you buy me a present or will it be the same old same old,,
Take care out there young man, Yours Ian.T
.
PS:- irrepressible
adj
not capable of being repressed, controlled, or restrained
I go along with that, yours Sparrow
That's where I am!
Jess, really good piece of writing! Reminded me of George Carlin! Final verse is spot on!
Namaste,
LG
George Carlin!
That is fucking high praise indeed! Thank you my friend!
you writing is good
i agree with some of this except the religious part as you already know that. i do agree with the treating religion as brain damage. the religion we face on a global scale makes people do crazy things in its name of religion.
ta
Ba
not much argument from me, eph
I should maybe have blogged this.
But then again maybe I'll come back to it one day and re-write it with some of Judyanne's suggestions... yeah and maybe even some rhyme.
We could argue about the logic but I suspect it's more a matter of opinion.
oh, one extra point,
your ideas are not illogical, they are fucking dumb and not thought out. You never, ever say anything worth saying in your poetry.
You are just cute and colloquial.
A worthless poet.
Not to mention fucking wrong, abusive and ignorant,
sometimes.
But if by 'green' you mean jealous or naive, then you are really wrong, my friend.
With this line..‘Write poetry? Oh please, you'll be forgotten in
‘Write poetry?
Oh please,
you'll be forgotten
in fivexxxxxxnth tri-millions minutes’
Jess you shall never be forgotten
for good or bad
and
the third generation is too far away
kids don't recall their biological pops today
you're too sweet, Loved
really.
Thanks Jess.....
do you know
I was a kid school captain
and fell out with my games teacher ..
But when he left for home
we gave him a clock
and
he wept seeing it.
Times change we also do
we love those who are harsh yes,
but with meaning too
and
you are such a one
I wanted the world to know
you, are a loved
one...
from Loved
We are all Achilles
be our weakness in our heel or our brain
I would have said the last
I would have said the last two lines were the best a few days ago; however one of the Zionists in one of my peace groups sent me a email (we had been conversing via email, trying to build bridges) ended the email with *have Faith*. There was nothing else he could have said that would have mattered to me.
So I say to you my dearest trickster, "have faith". Love, imo, is greatly significant.
~A
As I said to Cat
As much as I detest the stupid, abusive, execrable Ayn Rand, the one thing she said that rings true to me is "faith is not a short-cut to knowledge, it is a short-circuit in the brain"
Faith is a problem as much as organised religion. It is just stupid. It can be seen in the light of the psychological definition of delusion "that which is obviously true to an individual or group, despite all the facts"
I am going to turn this into a poem
I will come back to it. Though sorely tempted to use Judyanne's suggestions verbatim and call it a co-write, I feel it leaves something important out.
I'll be back [mya ah aaah!]