t. reflexion
t. reflexion
Jul 28, 2011

A DAY AND A NIGHT

The world would have been flat
One long day without the night
If a rotating earth was not to be
Imagine the world-wide weariness

A day by a half, is laid to rest
When the sun sets in the west
Man, charmed by it, takes a respite
From the flurry, fanning the flames

His actions continue, but shifted
To the realities of the dreamland
Collapsing place, space and time
As he travels through his mind

Secrets of past long buried, revealed
To tweak the future from the present
The night has its many exploits, to rest
And to unlock the true nature of self

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript

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Comments

Candlewitch

Interesting view point. Make me curious as to your inspiration and your frame mind when you wrote it.

always, Cat

t. reflexion

Of childhood experience and adult knowledge forged to make sense by deduction. Dream is sometime taken as bad. The informed takes it as man;s key to unlock the complex nature of self. Thanks and best wishes.

tr