c lynn brooks
May 04, 2020

Dark Knight,Dark Night

Into the night you will ride
the moon overhead your only guide
the wind whips at your face
the evil one at your heel
he leads you to a place
where no one needs to feel

Wearing the darkness as your cloak
no promise made,no promise broke
ah but such dreamed filled eyes they spoke

They tell of you dark knight and where you were led
on unanswered questions
no light was shed
only the ravages of a hunger left unfed

Then somewhere in the distance you hear a sound
echoes abound,they surge and pound
rivulets are forming from the fears
too soon,too soon you realize they are tears

It is still gaining ground
you can still hear the sound
too soon,too soon it is upon you
giving one a start
oh why must you try to outrun your heart

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: north carolina usa, USA

Favorite Poets: Leonard Cohen

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

4 years 11 months ago

you really have a handle on Killer! I recognized his story right away, you really got him cold. I like the uneven tempo, it just makes the story seem more ragged and powerful. Your rhyming is faultless and I only have one crit. and that is the typo that occurs in the last line of the second stanza; you are missing the[ o ]in spoke. No matter if this is not really about Killer, this is really a good profile of a serial-killer. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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C

Amazing! If you knew who this was written for
He is a very dear friend that will not admit his love for another(not me)
interesting how people read and relate different things in a poem. But that is exactly what I am looking for to not spoon feed
why I write as I do. Interpretation is in the eyes of the beholder may I say
oh I caught the error and fixed it

Geezer

Geezer

4 years 11 months ago

Killer's ego sometimes gets the best of him. I guess he thinks everything is about him. LoL
~ Gee.
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