Enfold me dark Angel, Enfold me,
With your Black Satin Wings draw me near,
Draw me close to your soft swollen bosom,
Draw me far from life and its fears.
Embrace me dark Angel, Embrace me,
Keep me safe in the coldness of love,
Let my mind sink to the abyss
To be held as if in silk glove.
Teach me dark Angel, teach me,
You know that to you I am true.
Though you give yourself freely to others
None will be faithful to you.
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Your poem gave me the shivers
Your poem gave me the shivers. If that was your intention, well done, scary.
I enjoyed your use of metaphor and illiteration, both delivered in brevity.
A familiar subject matter given a modern day twist, well done. Ruby :)
Not quite
Hello Ruby. That was not the original intention, I just wanted something dark. Still I am very pleased with the effect. Alex
I just want to say
THIS IS ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL!
I don't know what but this whole poem is just amazing.
Thank you Jes,
Thank you Jes. I have just read a couple of your works. I enjoyed them. It will be interesting to see how you develop. Alex
Incredible
Just beautiful!
Hello Rose.
Thank you Rose, appreciated. Alex
Congratulations Alex on
Congratulations Alex on winning the poem of the week, I'm made up for you. Ruby :)
Thank You
Thank you Ruby. Alex
dear Alex,
you set the hook with your first line and its repetition. exquisitely haunting... the undercurrent of sorrow is delicious. there is a note of yearning that intensifies to the end of this piece. poignant, walking the razors edge of pain and pleasure that is devotion. thank you for this write. and congratulations to you.
* best wishes, Cat
Always so kind
Thank you Cat, you have always been so kind, it is appreciated. Alex
Thank You
Thank you Max. all comments appreciated. Alex
wonderful
absolutely awesome. I loved it
Dark Angel
Thank you Tiffany, so glad you liked it. I like to write (or try ) about the power women can exert over the weaker of the species. There are several Dark Angel poems and more to come. Alex.
Nicely Done!
My first read of the poem brought forth the memory of "Phantom of the Opera", but subsequent readings showed me there was more to it than that. Your "dark Angel" is a powerful figure, yet, somehow, seems to be made the victim by almost all. I'm still digesting this one. I really like a poem that takes me a while to work through all the nuances.
Thank You
Thank you Steve, It's always good when someone appreciates one's efforts. Alex
Gothic feel
Loved the gothic feel to your well crafted poem.
And as has been already said, the poem sends shivers down one's spine when reading it.
Dark Angel
Hello Kaz, thank you always good to hear reactions. That was number 5 of several that i have written that I call Dark Angel. I'll put them up from time to time. Alex
Dark Angel 5
This took me back to embryo where all is dark
and fear is veiled. Then into early childhood.
Amazing, amazing enveloping!
Dark Angel 5
This took me back to embryo where all is dark
and fear is veiled. Then into early childhood.
Amazing, amazing enveloping!
Angel.
Thanks for your comments Aesthetic. Alex
Cold
"Keep me safe in the coldness of love"
This phrase gave me a pause, and I sat to consider it for a while. What a fascinating contrast to illustrate an embrace, and then call love cold!
Thank You
Thank you Alaethia for your comments on my efforts. I will not respond to all except to repeat. Thank you so much. Alex
Thank You
Thank you Mark, always gratifying to receive compliments. Alex.