Apr 12, 2012

Cycle of a Mad Man

Wake up every day,
And expect change,
Hope for the world to spin the other way,
This is a mad man’s game,

Carry on as they say,
Look the other way,
Watch the mad man run away,

Innocence lost,
A luxury difficult to obtain,
And as desire cries for escape,
Lock her away,
Another day of the mad man’s game.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: California

Comments

Very potent,

Very potent poem, with a mallady of want. I believe that your poem needs a bit more punch, it just falls short of being a great write. Regards Roscoe..