Rula
Rula
Nov 06, 2012
This poem is part of the workshop:

fixed verse – it's not a curse

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Count Your Blessings

"Count your blessings", tells the saying,
think about the goods you're haying.
 Forsake your ills, forget them all 
 Your blessings make the grieves forestall.
Healthy paws enhance the swaying.

Money's worthless love is paying .
 Every little thing is weighing
with health and passion-overall.
Count your blessings.

Cheer your heart as faith is staying .
Boons alike the scent are spraying,
 just sing, your songs one day befall.
 The world shall tell and loud recall,
 money's worthless health is paying,
count your blessings. 

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

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Comments

judyanne

although they have the ‘ing’ ending rula, 'lying' and 'flying' don’t rhyme with 'saying', 'haying', ]staying', 'weighing'

and the scansion is out with

‘Live for ] mor -row, | let reg -| rets fall
and
‘Tell the | world, and | loud -ly | re -call
 

otherwise – great rondeau
love judy
xxx

Rula

Rula

12 years 5 months ago

A difficult form. Yes a challenging one (at least for me)  :)

I knew about these words -lying and flying - but couldn't think of anything else .May be later.

Those two lines:

 Tell the world, and loudly recall

I can edit to

the world shall tell and loud recall

and ..

Your blessings make the grieves forestall 

 

 

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