"Count your blessings", tells the saying,
think about the goods you're haying.
Forsake your ills, forget them all
Your blessings make the grieves forestall.
Healthy paws enhance the swaying.
Money's worthless love is paying .
Every little thing is weighing
with health and passion-overall.
Count your blessings.
Cheer your heart as faith is staying .
Boons alike the scent are spraying,
just sing, your songs one day befall.
The world shall tell and loud recall,
money's worthless health is paying,
count your blessings.
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hi rula
although they have the ‘ing’ ending rula, 'lying' and 'flying' don’t rhyme with 'saying', 'haying', ]staying', 'weighing'
and the scansion is out with
‘Live for ] mor -row, | let reg -| rets fall’
and
‘Tell the | world, and | loud -ly | re -call’
otherwise – great rondeau
love judy
xxx
Hello Judy
A difficult form. Yes a challenging one (at least for me) :)
I knew about these words -lying and flying - but couldn't think of anything else .May be later.
Those two lines:
Tell the world, and loudly recall,
I can edit to
the world shall tell and loud recall
and ..
Your blessings make the grieves forestall
What do you think?
spraying and swaying ....good
spraying and swaying ....good alternatives?
what do you think?
Does it read a little preachy?
very rula-esque
i like it
and no - it doesn't sound 'preachy' - at least not to me'
- and great meter
love judy
xxx