Greetings all... I feel this is unfinished and maybe a little long-winded... I also seem to always overlook at least one grammatical error, regardless of my diligence...
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Conversations with The Universe
She tried
time and time again
to navigate to her-self.
… walking the dreamscape reaches
of soul-visions
quickening of the senses
as she attempted
to decipher
the eclectic elements of her inner truth…
… awakening via conversations with the universe;
Where to begin; other Travellers share the journey
brush past seen and unseen
some creating ripples of energy
positive and negative…
chain-reactions
release explosions of power -
vibrations are interactive
connecting the mutational threads of the matrix
to our fluctuating neural pathways…
At the crossroads of evolution and
devolution
obtuseness-ever-present
march back along the path travelled
declining into
perpetual apathy…
or
rejoice in the midst of a divine redefining
life is the nature of flow, and of us. Nothing is impossible.
Except for obstacles invented, visualized
- created in moments of self-doubt.
Where to begin…
… quickening of the senses
as she attempted
to decipher
the eclectic elements of her inner truth…
… awakening via conversations with the universe;
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Comments
I think that...
you will get along very well here at Neo. I particularly liked the repetition of the first and last stanzas. Like it was some sort of cycle. Very nice. Nothing posted here is ever beyond adding to, subtracting from or just plain fiddling with. We try to give meaningful critique and comments, so that you have the opportunity to do just that! That is the beauty of this site! I hope that you will take advantage of our workshops and enter the monthly contest. Welcome! ~ Geezer.
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Thank You!
I do look forward to participating in workshops and contests, I enjoy a creative challenge. Many thanks for taking the time to welcome me aboard.