Confusion and Chaos
A child is hurt oh hear the cries!
An empty world;
With no hope unfold;
But lashes and bruises!
Circles of the wound, which opens so wide
Should I had die, die, die!
A child is hurt oh hear my cries!
Hunger pangs in the middle of the belly;
Throat runs dry, it’s hard to swallow;
What was led to starvation?
As part of the hatred towards a child
Should I had die, die, die.
A child is hurt oh hear my cries!
Locked in a room as time flies by;
Only to escape when footsteps are gone;
Only to see the brighter sun;
Only to feel as others play;
Only to be loved in childhood days;
Should I had die, die, die!
A child is grown up oh hear the cries!
Of a broken heart, weaker minds;
Just perpetuating that untold pain;
For what once was a story remains hidden;
But born the fruits of broken souls into families;
A child who lived yet did not die;
Faced the pain of childhood fears;
Should I had die, die, die!
Where is Mummy or Daddy?
Should they not protect the flock and provide?
They are here ever so near, as they were the ones I had to fear;
A child is hurt, oh hear the cries
Anyone! Anyone! Anyone!
Comments
The effect of repetition:
"A child is hurt oh hear the cries!"
It makes the readers realize that it's an important part of the poem and asks them to pay special attention to it.
Repetition brings the meaning, theme into some focus. The poem portrays a childhood punishment, mistreatment through hunger strike and house cell. It was so terrible that no one comes to your aid or even your parents at least to have a change of mind. It seems your parents are very hardened.
The imagery used in the poem was so descriptive! It appeals to the readers imaginations and senses as well.
Pathetic, emotive, heart-rendering story!
Onyinyechi Cosmos yes that is
Onyinyechi Cosmos yes that is the raw reality of this poem it's a real factual experience of child abuse in the childhood years. It is painful and raw, it was done by the parents. Thank you for taking the time to comment and share your thoughts on this piece. I sincerely appreciate it.
I’m finding your voice
This is my favorite one yet. I think I’m starting to understand the delivery of the lines better as far as timing is concerned. The emotional output is astounding. Look forward to reading more stuff. Sending healing and comfort.
Tim
Tim thank you for taking the
Tim thank you for taking the time to share your input and perspective on this piece. Thank you for your inspirational words. Most appreciative.
While I may not...
make criticisms, I will provide a measure of respect for the voices that you call out with. I am impressed! ~ Geezer.
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Geeza thank you for sharing
Geeza thank you for sharing your comment, but may I humbly ask for knowledge's sake, what do you mean when you say "you will provide a measure of respect for the voices that you call out with."
Thank much.
He’s saying
He loves the voice you write with. I do too.
Tim
Tim thank you so much for
Tim thank you so much for responding, and for the compliment.
That's exactly...
what I meant! I am not so good at freeverse poetry and sometimes, I mistake how it's being said; but I think that I am pretty good at determining what you said. I like what you have to say! ~ Geezer.
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Geezer thanks again for the
Geezer thanks again for the clarification. Your comment was indeed appreciated and insightful.