Oozing smooth through velvet pores
Seeping out from cupboard doors
This modern social Anti-Christ
This 'Common Purpose' poltergeist
Created in Nazi Germany
This enemy so hard to see
Your nosey neighbour now a spy
Don't let its danger pass you by
This bankers' human rights destroyer
Appealing to public paranoia
This people's cause so self-defined
To terrorise the human mind
This peer-led form of mind control
Lays bogus claims upon your soul
And to this beast of nowadays
My middle finger I shall raise
The scum behind this social plague
Should all be tried at The Hague
And if the courts are no solution
Then bullets can cure persecution!
copyright Phil Atherton 2014
Aug 09, 2023
This poem is part of the contest:
Neopoem Of The Week August 6th to August 11th Winner
THE COMMON PURPOSE LULLABY
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Speaks for itself!
Style/Type: Structured: Western
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OMG that was fantastic, great
OMG that was fantastic, great job, Ruby :)
thanks!
Won some kind of award for this one elsewhere. Nothing received to go next to the darts trophies though.
Congratulations on winning
Congratulations on winning the poem of the week contest. Well deserved. Ruby :)
delighted!
More to come, also will post some of my DVD.