Jack W. Stanley
Jun 07, 2022
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Neopoem Of The Week Contest June 5th to June 11th 2022 🏆 Winner

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Come to me

Come to me and take a chance,
Throw caution in the wind.
Test your luck, don’t hesitate,
She who dares can only win.

Jump off a cliff so high and steep,
Come, choose risk to take.
Dive into a sea so deep,
You won’t melt, you’re no snowflake.

Come, forget all fear and doubt,
I’ll show you what it’s all about,
A new world of sensation.

Put on the parachute and leap,
Pray the lord your soul to keep,
Press pause on hesitation.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Europe, Serbia

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 10 months ago

one thing out of the way: I see a typo in the third line-second stanza. " Dive into a se[a] so deep. I especially like the last stanza.
"Put on the parachute and leap
.Pray the Lord your soul to keep
.Press pause on hesitation"

A really nice turn of phrase and play on words. ~ Geezer.
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J

Thanks for pointing out the typo. I have reread the poem numerous times and repeatedly failed to notice it.
Again, thanks for the encouragement.

Cheers
Jack

Candlewitch

I too am taken with the last stanza. very deep!

*hugs, Cat

J

Thank you for more kind words.
Honestly this bit was almost completely changed as it somehow did not sound just right to me. Now I am glad I stopped looking for alternatives :-)

Jack

One

I have written for over 30 years, the times I've re-read & re-written a stanza only to be told later when receiving a critique that it now doesn't work happens too often.

Glad you didn't fall into my trap & change anything too much. It reads awesomely & I have learnt to wait for other poets comments before embarking on a major change. Nine times out of ten the original words were fine, just a tweak occasionally.

Enjoyed the poem.

regards

One.

J

Thank you very much for the support. I am happy that you enjoyed it.

Regards,
Jack

Jackweb

I can figure out a master or instructor in the poem giving helpful guide lines to take risk in life.

I liked the poem. Very instructive!

Candlewitch

dear Jack,

I extend my hand to you in wishing you many more poems like this one (I know you have them in you, just waiting to surface) and offering my congratulations!

*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy

J

I cannot thank you enough for your support since my first poem here. I will try not to dissapoint you with any of my future work.

Hugs,
Jack

J

I browsed back to this one and noticed a comment I did not respond to. I apologize for that.
Thank you for the support.

(Yesterday I finally got my hands on a copy of the anthology. Oh, happiness! :-) )