I remember the days, years ago,
of negotiating our terms of living together
Learning to navigate each other’s emotional maps
It was an awkward and exciting time
Nothing was too much to ask,
nothing too small to remember
Here we are now, in our days of gold,
trying to agree on what we want to plant in our garden,
or which book we should both read next
I’ll fall asleep tonight next to you
with hope and a chance to see my best friend again
In the dusty amber morning light
Filtered through windows
you asked me to clean weeks ago!
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hello,
I like your title, as well as the poem itself. I think it tells a story of give and take,which is what successful couples do. this flows very well. I liked the touch of humor at the end...made me *smile!
*hugs, Cat
Thanks C! Glad this worked
Thanks C! Glad this worked for you. Appreciate your thoughts!
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Lovely poem about a couple.
Lovely poem about a couple. That's how one's parents usually kept together (infidelities were mostly overlooked).
The title, the flow and the theme appeal to me. No nits.
Enjoyed, Gracy
Hi Gracy! This one is more
Hi Gracy! This one is more autobiographical, so it's taken many years to gel into a poem. Sometimes I try to capture a moment, or maybe many decades. Poetry is always amazing in its' ability to compress or expand time.
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This actually...
is a reasonably accurate picture of what it is like to live with another human being that you care about. You share the space and the duties. Taking out the garbage, washing the dishes, etc. You forgive the failings of one another and forget your own duties now and then. Good write, not a thing I would change. ~ Geez.
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Thanks Geez! I always
Thanks Geez! I always appreciate your time and comments!
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I think
This poem will take any couple back to the momory link, for its explain the struggle in a marriage life,nice one I must say.
I rather learn how to fish than beg for one.
Hi Simon! Glad you liked this
Hi Simon! Glad you liked this one. Definitely some personal memories in this one.
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Nicely put
It’s gentle, no remorse, just loving.
Thank you Ray! Best
Thank you Ray!
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