CLICHES workshop: It only comes once
It's all good<
Until you hurt some one
Keep it on the down low<
It’s best they don’t find out
It ain't nothing but a chicken wing<
When I look at the scheme of things
I am truly
Hot to trot<
To see what comes of this
A mile a minute<
You run your mouth
To many cooks spoil the broth<
Then plans fall apart
Silence is golden<
Just keep your trap shut
Free as a bird<
To do as you please
Love is blind<
But not for long
A necessary evil<
Is good some times
All hands to the pump<
Get ready here it comes
The lesser of two evils<
I hope for your sake
Acid test<
You still must pass
Scarce as hen's teeth<
I am for you
The icing on the cake<
If it all works out
I'm game<
As long as no one finds out
Rotten to the core<
Is what you are, haha!
A rolling stone gathers no moss<
But some times you can’t avoid bumps
Like a seven year itch<
You’ve wanted this
Keep your nose to the grindstone<
And do what you must
Knock it out of the park<
Show them all who you are
Knock the cover off the ball<
In this endeavor
Age before beauty<
Only in this case
Fresh as a summer's rain<
You’ll smell at the end
Deeper than the deepest ocean<
Should be your thoughts
doing my head in<
Is my worry for you
step up to the mark<
And begin this long term plan
rise to the occasion<
This is your final chance
Comments
many cliches causes blindness
you did good writing this. my eyes hurt trying to read it all and still find a flow that works. lol
great work
Barbara
Good, I don't think so. this poem is truly a mess.
Eddie
i agree its a mess
because i could not find a flow any where that worked lol.
which is what cliches tend to do not flow well. you did good with what we are given
Eddie
Another great use of cliches
Lou
thanks i think you guys are
thanks i think you guys are just being nice
Eddie
Eddie
you did good considering I have read worse.
I don't know if that's a
I don't know if that's a compliment huh!
Eddie
It is
try reading Ian cliches lol
Ian
lol love you Ian
no I have not read the edited version, but I will. you've edited it already?
Chrys
Did you just call my poem a mess?
I am a good poet, I went for mess and achieved it. Hooray!
look guys I won!
(Chrys did you get my payoff, He whispers in her ear)
Eddie
hahaha!
hahaha!
Hahaha! I liked your cliched
Hahaha! I liked your cliched mess.
But what smells at the end? lol.
Barbara, you're hysterical--many cliches cause blindness, along with mental masturbation?
~A
Chrys
Ian explained it better then I could ever.
Stop laugh at me I'm sensitive. LMAO!
Eddie
hahaha
I'm a babe here - mental masturbation causes blindness? lol
Ian
Thanks, that's a dead on explaintion
Water wings not working, damn things didn't bring instructions!
(note to self: call Ian maybe he knows how they work)
Eddie
Eddie
Eddie,
I can't see how any of us can make the poems personal when we have little alternatives to use, nobody can make all those cliches personal sounding.
Mine is better than yours Eddie!
LOL!
HS
Dan
I'm the best cliche writer here, I know crap when I see it, and mine is the best crap. lol
Eddie
*Your's is the best crap*? I
*Your's is the best crap*? I'll go along with that.
;-)
~A
I agree with...
...you, it is crap and how embarrasing that any new members are going to come along to this wonderful site and judge us all as being totally crap!
Luckily for you Eddie, their first impression will be correct!! LOL!
HS
Or
They'll be so bad, that they'll think we are really abstract poets, and reveir us,
Fuck as someone said here I can"t remember, maybe Anna, we've created a new form/style. LOL!!
And
I like that book idea Anna came up with
Neopoet book of cliches also
How to write Non Cliche Poems
it could be a soft cover book or online book teaching aid
or something
great ideas we come up here can be income source for Neopoet once published
Anna
Do you need change for your two cents, LMAO!!
Wise ARSE!
Love you girl,
Eddie
Eddie
yep lol
Ian
i think that a great idea
i don't know why but i can't seem to get into blogging thing
i am though filing all these ideas in a file on my computer for the day when such ideas are made possible
Eddie
it certainly a hard thing to do to use those assortments of cliches..under the circumstances your effort was good...i am going nuts while trying to have a go at it...lol...
raj,
the point is we can't write in cliches, so why crack your head. cliches a poem does not make. originality is everything. it's your voice that must be heard in the poem. That's why this workshop is good and fun. it challenges our brains.
thanks to Chrys, who I will kill later LMFAO!!!
Eddie
Eddie
who is the petty lady
i have recreate my cliche' poem already waiting to see what to do next.
What monday?
I posted the re-write already!
Fast Eddie
Barb
That my lady Jonette, the woman I'm in love with. I much rather look at her face then mine.
I posted my re-write to the stream already.
Eddie