raj
Mar 29, 2015

Chequered path

In the labyrinth of darkness
i script white spaces between black ellipses
on these cobbled thoughts I walk
some hurt others soothe
till somewhere in between those oohs and aah
I'm tranquil

come dawn
I re-tread the alpha beta omega.....

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I am aware this may not appeal to many and very likely it may not conform to any poetic norm which is absolutely ok...so I am open to the harshest criticism because this one is written only to salve my craving to write something ...ideally I would have preferred this one to have no title but the rules here do not permit it hence the chosen one .. period

Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

Rula

seems like a description of a life experience. Loved the imagery there.
The last line went over my head though some would like the dark touch there. It's probably only me.

R

raj

10 years ago

Thanks for your time and read.

Regards,

judyanne

Great free form Raj
The symbolism is really good - I especially love the 'cobbled thoughts'
And the concluding stanza is a gem

I wish I had written this
love judy
xxx

R

raj

10 years ago

Thanks for your visit & time.

Best regards,

mand

I love the imagery of this one - this one "to me" is deep and needs more than one read - but the effort is worth it! ( I like the title too )

Love to you

Mand xxxx

wesley snow

Your poems receive positive attention and suggestions. Like mine.
I liked the poem. I understood the poem, but like Rula I'm confused about the last line. Is the subject focused on a mind exercise as part of a ritual?

Sparrow

It is hard to write about Alpha and Omega without a more lengthy piece to carry the thread, I had a Chequered Path once as I was a pawn in the game of life lol.
Feelings spread over the far ends of being and a being over the far ends of feeling, I wrote this short piece a long time ago, if you see what you can get lost in, (Feels like answering a question with a question:-
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There in infinity dwelt a silence of a void
The void with its glow, pulsed Alpha and Omega
Here is where man in his limited ways cannot be
For infinity has no place for time or things like man

The glow pulsed for an instant, was this infinity
Born of the voids of timeless distance and space
Infinity stirred pushing, pulsing, spreading outward
Once again pushing itself into the birth of being

Filling the eternal void as it exploded outward
Further it pushed into being, there was the light
Spurred on by its release into the short eternity
So once again Alpha reached out its hand for Omega.
Take care young traveller, talk to you later,
Yours Ian

R

Thank you for your time, read and response. I liked your poem.

Regards,

Sparrow

I hope all your family are Ok, and that you can rest this weekend, I shall return this evening late, way past your dreamtime so enjoy the rest of today, Yours, Ian.