Carnival stars masked as streetlights
lead you to a dark green house
at the end of a street you’d never
dare go down, for no real reason,
of course. People have found here
reasons for living, reasons for dying,
And the cracked paint is patterned;
you just don’t know how.
Where is the line you came from?
The line that led here?
You can find no doorbell inside
You can find no anything
Only footsteps, a few heads
saturate in colors..And the man
that holds your letter just approaching.
Comments
Love the story
Love the images, the enjambment, the sort of cliffhanger ending, all of it.
One tiny suggestion for you to consider:
instead of "You can find no anything", why not smoother and more typical way of saying the same thing with "You can't find anything" or "You can find nothing"? Just a thought. If you keep it as is, it certainly doesn't detract from the poem by any means. It just makes your reader pay closer attention, which is always a good thing.
Take care,
Kels
Thank yo
very much Kelsey--yes, that was actually a typo, the "nO" thing. I hope you've been well