There is a road that
I ride on it is rough
It seems so far away
miles ahead of me
It is impossible to
find the way
through the tunnel
sometimes it feels lost
to know where to go
I refused to give up
to take the initiative
to remind of myself
always stay positive
to keep things going
finding the right direction
to the successful path
persistent is the key
when it comes to
face with challenges
to stand up bravely
overcome obstacles
accomplish the goal
May 06, 2023
Challenge- I did it myself
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Challenge- I did it myself" is a motivational piece that aims to inspire readers to persevere in the face of obstacles and achieve their goals. The use of simple language and straightforward structure makes the message of the poem accessible to a wide audience.
However, the poem could benefit from some improvements in terms of imagery and figurative language. The descriptions of the road and tunnel lack specificity and fail to evoke a strong sense of visual or emotional impact. Additionally, the poem could benefit from a stronger opening and closing, as the current lines feel somewhat abrupt and disconnected from the rest of the piece.
One suggested line edit is to revise the opening line to add more detail and create a stronger hook for the reader. For example, "There's a winding road ahead, full of bumps and dips" adds more specificity and creates a more engaging opening.
Overall, "Challenge- I did it myself" is a solid piece of motivational poetry that could benefit from further development in terms of imagery and structure.
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