She is like a cat in the dark,
Her eyes twinkle and spark.
She slinks around,
Like a ghost in the town.
And lives amongst the alleys.
She avoids conflict until pursued,
Once angered she won't be subdued.
If you dare chase this kitty,
Man, you have my pitty.
She may seem shy,
but in her eyes.
I see a mysterious side,
life is a tough ride.
for this girl I can tell,
I can read her well.
So don't go chasing,
don't go wasting.
Your time and energy.
Her eyes how they shine,
in the night like a dime.
And her hair how it flows,
What she thinks,
nobody knows.
Comments
in agreement,
Mark has covered it well, really nothing else to say, But I liked the simplicity of it. Well done!
"Welcome to "Neopoet" The most fun can be had here. keep writing, I will look for your writes around the site
Eddie
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Hello Nichole,
I loved this poem about the mysterious lady who is cat-like. My only suggestion is to change the second line:
It now reads:
She is like a cat in the dark,
Her eyes have lost their spark
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I would change the second line to read something like this:
{Her eyes shine and spark} or something to that effect, because it is contradictory to a cat;s eyes and to the rest of the poem.
Great imagery in this piece and the lines flow very well from one line to the next. My favorite lines are:
She avoids conflict until pursued,
Once angered she won't be subdued.
If you dare chase this kitty,
Man, you have my pitty.
She may seem shy,
but in her eyes.
I see a mysterious side,
life is a tough ride.
for this girl I can tell,
I can read her well.
I also like the title!
always, Cat
Hi there Nichole,
Good job!
always, Cat
THANK YOU!!! :)
Thanks a million for helping everyone.
Nichole
A lovely jumpy piece with lots of life in those allies and by ways, I have a very wide Zimmer Frame so wont be chasing her, I lie, but it sounds good.
Great write, Yours Ian.T
PS:- I notice our own lovely Cat went very quiet on this one lol.
:) Thank you (:
Thank you. I wrote this at like 4:30 in the morning in about a ten minute time frame.
I'm not sure what you mean by my cat went quiet???
I enjoyed writing this one. The cat like woman is modeled after me.
I thank you for reading and liking my write.
Can;t wait to hear back from you.
Nichole
Nichole
Our own dear Cat I was referring too. lol
We have two mini Dachunds here so no room for anything else they would object strongly.
So glad you cleared up as to which cat you were talking about, meow.
Have a lovely day, Yours Ian.T
hello
The catwoman lives lol. Why don't you try leaving off she is in first line and putting a stanza break after "your time and energy" and see how you like it.............stan
Her eyes how they shine in the night like a dime
Liked that line specially, wow what a picture and warning I am scared to go out now, but then I am a woman, so no need to worry perhaps!
OOO I see you say "modelled after me" you don't look like that to me, but looks can be misleading! No wonder you can "read her well."
Ann
Giggle giggle
Thank you very much :) Yes, the "Cat like Woman" is supposed to be me. Slinking around avoiding conflict.
I'm changing my life right now and walking away from the dramas of my past. I enjoyed writing this poem. Thank you for your kind words. Keep readin :)
I have nothing left to wrte.
I have nothing left to wrte. They said it all. Your work is adnirable !
Joe
WOW
Thank you Joe!!!
I appreciate your kind and gentle words. I really enjoyed this one.
How long have you been on neopoet?? I hope you enjoy it.
Thank you for reading, Keep it up. I'd like to see some of your work sometime.
nichole
I've been on NEO for about 3
I've been on NEO for about 3 years.I am happy to hear that you are enjoying it.
Joe
Oh wow
Nice to meet you. I'm Neopoet's Director of the moderators. Yes I enjoy neopoet a LOT. And I hope you are as well. Thank you for your time.
Nichole