Castle of Light

Our castle is filled with jewels and crystal chandeliers.
Lasers flash on and off heightening my senses and fears.
Rainbows of light bounce off the white plaster dome.
In the morning, the sun light reflects off all the chrome.
The crystal prisms spin and flash colors so bright.
Like all fantasies, this dream is just God’s light.
I close my eyes and you are always in my sight.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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About the Author

Country/Region: Hawaii Big Island USApoet . i have written about 100 poems and am waiting for new inspiration!

Favorite Poets: I have never read poetry . I just sat down one day and started to write and after two years I had written 100 poems (free verse) and the inspiration to continue passed!

Comments

Hey U.W.,

The imagery in this poem reminds me of a cathedral more than a castle! It's also a tiny bit psychedelic and ethereal, with flashing lights and glistening colors, isn't it?

I am interested in learning the inspiration behind this poem. Like I said, it makes me think of a cathedral, especially with the final couplet's statement about God, but otherwise, I'm not sure what God is supposed to signify in the poem, because you've actually called this place a castle. I would love to hear your thoughts so I can say something more about the poem.