Bluebird

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Bluebird" demonstrates a strong understanding of narrative and rhythm, which are key elements in poetry. The narrative of the bluebird singing a child to sleep is clear and engaging, and the rhythm is consistent throughout the poem, which helps to create a soothing, lullaby-like quality.

However, there are a few areas where the poem could be improved. First, the phrase "a bluebird of sorts" is somewhat vague. It might be more effective to use more specific language to describe the bird, which would help to create a more vivid image in the reader's mind.

Second, the phrase "alone in its crib" could be rephrased to avoid the use of "its," which is typically used for objects rather than people. Using "his" or "her" instead would help to humanize the child and make the scene more relatable.

Finally, the last two lines of the poem seem to abruptly shift the focus away from the child and onto the bird's other tasks. While this does provide some closure, it might be more effective to end the poem on a note that ties back to the child or the act of singing, which are the main themes of the poem.

Overall, the poem shows promise and with a few tweaks, it could be even more effective.

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the story and the near rhyme. Only one little bobble in the line:
"And just as the child, was fast asleep"
I think you might need to add a syllable to it.
How about, "And just as the child was [gone] fast asleep".
Otherwise, great stuff!

~ Geez.
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I enjoyed how the bird lulled the child to sleep with its song. A way to connect nature to humans.

Hello, Leslie,
Delightful. Always lovely to have a caring visit, even if it's a little bluebird. I'd have to disagree with AI's assessment of the ending - I think it's perfect,
Thank you,
L

I thought the lending was right on. Child asleep the bird’s job ended.
Good poem.