WonderWoods
Oct 04, 2019
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Autumnal Equinox

Equal day and night
That leads to days of fright
The light of day pours into
Black, dark things that go BOO!

Then wind whips up the crisp leaves
While green needles sway in the breeze
Hats and scarves come out of hiding
While witches their brooms are riding.

The Summer is gone and so are you
But my heart still yearns for a love that's true.
I wait for Winters hoary frost to make
My heart feel less of the ache.

But Fall is here now and I dance
To a merry tune so there's a chance
That I might still find true love
When I swoop down on my broom from above!

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Maryland, USA

Favorite Poets: Alexander Pope

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Comments

Geezer

a lot of good lines here. They just need the proper syntax, to bring out the rhyme and make them pop.~ Geezer.
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