lou
lou
Mar 11, 2012
This poem is part of the workshop:

Assonance and consonance

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Assonance and consonance work shop - examples

Assonance 

When sober Booze Hound is sound, yes he is solid
down to earth he is a bloke whose thoughts are coherent.
Thoughts are well founded and down right consistent

Consonance

Mad bad and low down
danger hides deep in the depths 
Of his dirty debauched  soul

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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wesley snow

I'm guessing you know that the Elf is sick. He's asked me to "take over" the workshop until he returns. I of course said yes as I find it foolish to say no to magical creatures of any kind. My problem is I was looking forward to this shop because assonance and consonance, beyond the technical description, is rather beyond me. Our next assignment is to write a small piece on a specific mood or image using the "appropriate" assonance or consonance.
Here's my deal. When I read your sentence submissions all I hear is the sentence. I recognize the technique, but it changes nothing for me in the nature of the sentence.
What are your thoughts?
Alliteration I "hear" more clearly, but it is still nothing more than a trick to my ears. Until a poet loads too much alliteration it is only "cute". It does not seem to enhance the drama, sentimentality, humor or anything else. Too much of it sounds a little goofy, a little bit actually sounds kind of cool to me. So yes, I like the alliteration, but I don't hear a profound change in the character of the poem. Assonance and consonance, beyond recognizing it in a poem, does nothing. It simply repeats sounds to little effect.
Your consonance sentences are, effectively, alliteration to my ear. It does not add or detract.
Thoughts?
wesley

lou

lou

13 years 1 month ago

im not used to working with rules, i see this as a beginning.

lou