Another High

I tried weed to give me some hype
Wrong bloody stuff gave me second sight.
Now I hear that heroin is so very strong
Nearly drown in the toilet, when rescuing a thong

I can't be for this place at all,
not a bomber, so no virgins call
I saw this toadstool in the wood
It was red with white spots I thought Oh good!

So down I bowed to get a grip
Didn't know it was a frogs trick (Typo)
I grow deadly nightshade in my garden now
I hope Bella Donna is magic somehow

Wrong bloody dose it made me very ill
My heart as my broken watch stood still
I heard to make the heart race again,
Cyanide is the best thing; all it did was make me grin.

Sparrow, He, He. is me,?

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Let Sparrow have a go at writing a poem ???? I am going to my cave in the hills to contemplate anything, Yours Ian.T Someone is bored wonder who???

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Leicestershire, Ex Moonraker, GBR

Favorite Poets: All those I meet or read about in my books

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Comments

Ian, I am bored, have been all day smile

Dont you go too far if your not around you will be missed .... its a poem about deadly poisons that kill our kids and destroy families, I liked your handling of it

its so hot here today its going to be 40 degrees tomorrow I will be finding a hole somewhere to hide in or maybe just have a swim ALL DAY lol

I am back properly now, I have my computer back had to lend it to one of the kids they needed it for study till theirs was fixed, I am stoked to have it back

love always JC xxx

Jayne

Lovely to have you back again, I need some subjects to write on, have been a little out of writing this year.
We do many things here, making all our own cards and Challenges with card making and memorable book making.
I make all the decorative pins and dangley bits for the cards lol, if you ever have time just pop in to Anne's site and have a look at some of the bits we do.
There aren't enough hours in the day now, is this an Age thing lol.
I ain't planing on going anywhere as yet have too much to do, Thanks again for your visit, take care young lady, and know we think of you, Yours Ian.T

There aren't enough hours in the day now,?????

gosh
on 21March ...
the month you were born
hours day =hours night ==12 HOURS
nothing much has changed since
or have I been sleeping
for too long???
lolololololol

Loved

And you shall be called, Rip Van Winkle, well you did surprise me in the speed (Not the Drug) that you put a comment here, you are not asleep then lol.
I find it very tedious to have to go down to Stonehenge four times a year to see if the stones are in the right place, I have told Cata that this year is going to be the last, he just laughs at me.
He has arrived back from one of the old cities in Cambodia that he helped build in 500 AD or there about's they didn't really take much notice of day to day things, just the quarter days when stones may have needed adjusting lol.
Take care young Bard, Yours Ian.T He He