ALL THE KING’S HORSES
whirling dervish in a spin
far from the world I live in.
a sudden fall.
sparkling mirrors
of Murano
all
in refraction
a thousand broken
pieces I see
of me.
ALL THE KING’S HORSES
whirling dervish in a spin
far from the world I live in.
a sudden fall.
sparkling mirrors
of Murano
all
in refraction
a thousand broken
pieces I see
of me.
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Joe!!
How are you my friend? I am happy to see you here and missed reading your work. I hope all is going well for you and thought about you the other day wondered how you were doing. I am happy to see you here. God Bless you friend. Long lost Mona:)
I like your poem here!!
Thanks, Mona. Good to see YOU
Thanks, Mona. Good to see YOU.
Same here
Joe and I see you are actively writing again which is great. I came in today to see how everyone is
Always good to hear from you-
Always good to hear from you--as many times as you want :)
Thanks,
Joe
Excellent, pithy and effective
This is an example of the title totally enhancing the poem.
Yes, you said that about my
Yes, you said that about my last poem. I realzed how the title explains so succinctly the body of poem without writing further verses to clarify.
thanks, mate :)
Joe