weirdelf
weirdelf
Jan 19, 2016

Afternoon delight

When they fucked
God woke up,
fell off his throne
and rolled down the stairway from heaven.

Landing on earth he looked at the state of things and said
“My Self! Did I do this?”

The answer to this question
involved admitting either that
he wasn’t
omniscient, omnipotent
or that he had fucked up,
both options intolerable, of course.

So he doddled off to an old gods home.
His reception there
was enthusiastically hostile.

He had, after all,
been responsible
for most of their retirements.

The fucking couple,
in the meantime,
had noticed nothing,
except a desire
to do it again.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics

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Comments

Geezer

write! Just like you to use this to put a point across. I love that the couple noticed nothing, except for the desire to do it again! Hope to see you writing more. ~ Gee

lovedly

he would fuck
again and again
non stop
till the God of all fuckers
commences to hop
and
yells stop

fux say the couple
what for
fuck off

you have proved in this lovely verse
we all are really sincere fuckers
take care Jess
miss your fucking kicks
hope this fuk'in poem
gives you the wanton
kicks

my mind loves it's licks
glad no fuckin ticks
nor tricks

Eduardo Cruz

The two where selfish sons of a bitch just like your omnipotent one. The making of these two was to show all the heavenly horde he could do it, but Mr. Perfect didn't think it through (or rather the writer of the fairy tale didn't) we where left with a lot of holes and questions that any lawyer could take the whole story apart.
Thanks for sharing, you and I feel the same. "when it smells like bullshit, it is bullssssssshit!"
I feel that anyone with half a brain can see through this whole fantasy.
I am a God, and so are we all.
The secret is having choice!
Let's make them all think!
Truth...
keep in mind that when this was written, more then half of the world was uneducated
I love google, for questions. make them see the real light that is in their brain.
(as a switch is toggled to on in their brain, "and then there was light")

Eddie C.

lovedly

helps in the damage of greeness
and
nature is at their beck and call
they smoke it all up
car fuel, electricity generation and garbage incineration
add to pollution

in the East still it's over population Jess,
do have an open mind and think
fuckin imagination is the only commonality
so does population stink

Sparrow

It has been worked out that the world population even due to over copulation will stabilize at 11 billion,
This will be sometime in the near future, taking into account Africa and Asia and probably common sense in this world.
I am not going to stay till this happens as it will only put the figures out by 1..
Yours Ian..

Esker

Esker

9 years 3 months ago

very poetic approach to this
quest of the great quest
enjoyed it immensely!

I think when they get Plum Island tweaked
or Dr Moreau brings something
interesting we as a race will be
so much the better!
mixed with the scientoligists implanting
of our mini computers to make us
even more then what we are
with the special vamperism
so we can appreciate what we
are building by living more then
our short little rabbit lives now!

it just makes more sense

thank U Jess!

Roscoe Lane

Excellent, my thoughts exactly. But will the human believer ever wake up. Regards Roscoe....

emeka ozurumba

Pathetic poem , to conclude at this atheism and the poem if you will notice has no meaning because who do you think you are humiliating , this kind of poem is purposeless

Eduardo Cruz

Did you take this personal, can your God not defend him or herself?
Criticism is important, I didn't see any thing in the poem that was a direct attack on any religion. I do not believe in a God. So are you attacking people who don't believe in God. I am surprised, because that is a form of racism.

S

According to beliefs God gave us all free will. And That is what has led to our present state, not his neglect. But onward to the poem. It has a bit of humor and I doubt that God would be offended, especially the part about him being ill received at the old folks home . It also has a good flow without rhythm. Almost conversational. Enjoyed................stan

Sparrow

What the F..., for not believing in a god you just wrote a grand piece about him falling out of heaven???LOL
Loved its take on things and its mirth.
Yours Ian..

PS:- will consider your Message over this weekend it maybe that I have too much to do but can you let me know more as to its workload and what it will entail ??