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By scribbler, 6 February, 2011
Psyve

Psyve

14 years 2 months ago

This was almost classical in its form and meter.

A pleasure to read, as the meter is almost flawless.

Reminded me of Ogden Nash, for some reason... and his "The Common Cold".

Enjoyed this one.

Psyve

S

just a reminder of poetry's true function(at least in my opinion lol). Glad you liked it...............scribbler

lou

lou

14 years 2 months ago

You are right , i feel its all very well knowing about metre etc, but the poem is full of technique and no feeling, what is it worth.

Fabulous, fantastic, great poem.

lou

S

form should follow function not the other way around. True in architecture and poetry both I think........................scribbler

S

We must have a misunderstanding as I thought I was agreeing with your comment lol...................scribbler

Z

ziggy

14 years 2 months ago

"All poetry straight from the heart
has its own type of grace",,,,,,,this line says it all for me
I like the message in this write and I can only
agree with your sentiments here ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

S

Not to worry as I know somebody is probably on verge of saying this encourages sloppy writing lol................scribbler

K

Well! I never! Harummph!

Behind the mask
the same
unborn face

behind
the words,
cowering
with the fear
of being loved
for being who
we are, not who
we pretend to be

it's not that we're
inseparable, it's just
that we're all that we have
in common and nothiing
more .

Thanks scribe, you're the man!

~A

S

well, you never ?.............poor Barry lmao. I was afraid somebody would think this directed at them in particular instead of us all in general...................scribbler

S

I read your poem about this subject today and thought I'd post this to show you aren't the only one who feels this way at times......stan

lovedly

lovedly has made you all contribute more
in FREE STYLE

Suggest all move with time
be sublime

why to parrots old tunes
always rhyme
modern creativity is
NO CRIME
Dear Stan
scribble on

Sparrow

a very good resurrection,
It is time that we defined poetry in our modern world,
We have been locked in a classic mode for hundreds of years,
Today we have many pitfalls when writing, but our audience is now in the millions.
Neopoet could be trendy and talk of new ways, or what is our poetry NOW..
It is about time we held up William and his followers as an example of classical, then broached a modern stance in our writing.
Nor sure what to write about any more, or even how.
Go well young Stan and I will look out for a talk on this subject,
Yours as always, Ian..

S

I think I've let my beliefs about the direction in which poetry is heading be known before. But here they are again lol. I think that the poetry our younger offspring will write will be a cross between classic rhyme and "modern" free verse. Why? The use of rhyme makes poetry much easier to recall than most free verse. And I think everybody hopes to write a poem people can recall. But rhyme can be very limiting due to the restrictions it puts on getting the message across. This is where elements of free verse come into play. A LOT of what is being passed off as free verse nowadays is simply chopped prose. Thus the message is clear but not memorable and often without any poetic devices other than mere rhyme to help a poem be memorable.
So I think with free verse slowly disintegrating and rhyme being considered too restrictive I think a blend of the two is what is coming. Poetry with enough rhyme and poetic devices to be easily recalled but also with more freedom of expression than classic rhyme. So there will be poems in which rhyme is used to reinforce an other wise free verse poem and there will be otherwise rhyming poems in which not all rhymes are adhered to and stanzas will vary in length. Both will be done in order to free up the ease of expressing the message.
Enough of my nonsense lol......stan

Sparrow

This sounds like the way I write my pieces, the odd rhyming bit, and a general free verse overall.
I can never now see me writing a classic piece as age has taken its grip of my conforming to anything now, lol.
I think I shall wander with you in the aspen glades and watch the flat ass build, if you listen carefully you may hear the cough of a buck deer, mind out though, there are creatures out there that can move much faster than us now.
Take care you young at heart woodsman, and know you are held in high esteem,, ( not sure if the steem bit is old fashioned from the Iron horse days ????)
Yours as always Ian..

Is poetry a mere form letter
just fill in the blanks
merely form and nothing better?
if it is, no thanks!

I'll leave perfection to professors
in their sterile lecture halls
let them be the art's possessors
if they have the balls

All poetry straight from the heart
has its own type of grace
it's time the perfectionists start
to wipe the smirks from their smug face