Grand Old Hairline
by RW
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I don't know much history
yet less about economy
no clue about the policy
But Nixon had less hair than Kennedy
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I don't know about the deficit
can't expand on any party view
But this I know lickety split
Bush had less hair than Clinton too
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Don't know much about the arms race
My train of thought don't go that far
Though Mondale's case I did embrace
Reagan had more hair by far.
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I'm telling you so listen up
here is how it seems to be
The hair man wins the golden cup
There's Ford and Carter, you tell me
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Just one flaw in my theory
a gaping whole, huge and raucus
If hair's the key to presidency
then what the hell about Dukakis
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Could the work of fate be on my side?
In hairlines Gore and Quayle are tied
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So all you kids out there who long
to play croquet on the white house lawn
get a great 'do', ya can't go wrong
then strap the mediamatic on
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Be a Democrat or Republican
or Socialist get up and picket
Independent, Green, Libertarian
I vote a straight line Hairdo ticket
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The scary fact we can not fix
Don King in two-oh-one and six
Aug 06, 2012
Grand Old Hairline
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Whew!
Then I no longer need worry that the fool in the whitehouse will be re-elected lol..............stan
But Nixon had less hair than
But Nixon had less hair than Kennedy
Bush had less hair than Clinton too
- why not - for meter - simply have the reader wonder for the first two verses?
make these lines
But Nixon had less than Kennedy
Bush had less than Clinton too
a fun write ron - and as stan says - lol - no need to worry about the present one staying in that case
love judy xxx
Thanks Judy!
Yeah, this is a very unfinished write, there's a lot more I can do with it to make it more thorough. It is meant as just a fun little non-serious piece, certainly not any kind of real political statement. I'll look at it and see if I can incorporate your suggestions. Thanks for the critique and thoughful criticisms. : )
Ron