BARREN NIGHTS
The night came upon me
barren
no nurturing light
no warmth in its darkness
stars veiled in black embrace
meaningless to its own existence.
mirrored reflection....
BARREN NIGHTS
The night came upon me
barren
no nurturing light
no warmth in its darkness
stars veiled in black embrace
meaningless to its own existence.
mirrored reflection....
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
nice one
'''stars veiled in black embrace.....
nice choice of words too
I am very happy you enjoyed
I am very happy you enjoyed this one.
Joe
I like this one as an intro to more, you have given us a glimpse of one part of being there and as Loved said the words chosen are good..
I just felt that there is more to this one, Yours Ian.T
Strike with words and images
Strike with words and images surreal and leave the reader stunned or dismayed, Pull out an emotion.
Beautifully neat this now.
Beautifully neat this now.
It makes a new stunning whole that I like a lot.
Anni :)
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