Geremia
Geremia
Jun 03, 2012

Scottie, Beam me up

Scottie, Beam me up

I move between
the speed of life
and the point of freeze
pulled to the ground
bound by the gravity
of my situation.

There are times
when I stumble
and begin to fold
just before
I hit the floor
like a puppet
without a string
or a bird
with broken wing.

I’ve had enough
of this strange place.
There must be
a better star for me
In outer space.
Scottie, beam me up.

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Nordic cloud

This one has an underlying humour that is great,
blending the two emphasises the one sad reality,
and you do it well.

Great poem Joseph,
I love the folding its so expressive:-

"There are times
when I stumble
and begin to fold
just before
I hit the floor
like a puppet
without a string
or a bird
with a broken wing."

Scottie makes me think of a Scottie dog,
but it must have some other meaning that I don't yet know of!

Love Anni of Norway.

K

Scotty, beam me up was said by Capt. Kirk and others on the Starship Enterprise. Sometimes I think we're all transplanted starchildren, trying to find our way back home (ET phone home!)

I wish you'd flesh this one out a little more, Joe...and lose the *a* before broken wing.

How are you doing these days?

~Anna

judyanne

lol - 'beam me up scottie'
- i heard somewhere that, no matter it is the phrase known by all trekkies and non-trekkies alike, it was actually never said in any epiosode of star trek...

'pulled to the ground
bound by the gravity
of my situation'
- i really like the introduction of the subtext here joe ... very clever with the double entendre of 'gravity'

.a very powerful write - great use of rhyme
love judy
xxx