Blackbird

Hey, Blackbird! Do you finally get the gist?
Are you ready to cut your wrist?
Or do you still think you're in control?

I'm sorry. But, it's too late to say you're missed.
Remember when we finally kissed?
Oh! How we thought we'd made the roll!

Let's face it. You'll forever be on my list.
I did enjoy our little tryst...
...."to continue" is what I wished, and missed.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates

Comments

Doc

This needs more of the story, to bring it into an eye catching piece, I missed the theme here some place can you come back on this one,
Yours Ian.T

Well sir....

...it was merely a sort of "rant" after my last break-up; but I thought I'd see what anyone thought about my rhyme scheme, in this one.
It was personal,
doc.