Soul Assassin

I get that you are writing of a cold and calulating person. I can relate to this because I have just eliminated once such as you speak of from my life. Your words gave me the shivers in remembering. Good work! I love the title. It fits.

always, Cat

A lovely burst of anger expressed well.
How we who have experienced such, sympathise,
I was so lonely, but not quite the same,
no abuse, no communication at all,
I don't know what's worse.

Ann.

lovely to see you

a wonderful write
great word usage
‘purposefully striding forward' so sets the pace and feel of the write – very powerful

I just love the alliteration in coldness, condemnation – the c sharp staccato to suit the concept

the only suggestion I have is that you divide it into stanzas at the beginning of every trait - purposefully, destructive, coldness, relentless…
that way the reader takes time to digest each comment

favourite part
the end
‘Relentless disapproval
meant to reprimand me
like a child
and with it
an attempt to steal my joy’

great to read you again
love judy
xxx

"that resides in your heart
and shoots from the mouth"

sit and take it>... the old ways
not anymore
everyone now has a voice
that put down
the squash y our soul days
grinding to an end for some

take back your power
your worth

why let a thorn steal against your soul
the dour mirth

rise up from that
tall proud strong
and run it back to where it belongs

incredible poetry here
thank You

Had been wondering what happened to you. I also have known people who seemed incapable of anything but disapproval.I agree that the only thing I see to change is to maybe break this into stanzas. At the same time it may well have been your intention to let the unbroken flow of lines mimic the relentless condemnation...........stan

Love this poem. Good job.

Alid